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Do you want me?
She asked.


Rain Pounded
Against the icy path
Scattered red-


Like a bird wants to fly.

Roses
Wilting at the touch
Is this really-


Do you need me?
She asked.


The end?
And will your tears
Never-


Like the clouds need the wind.

Cease?
I never wanted
To tear-


Do you love me?
She asked.


Your heart
Yet the blood
Still-


Like the stars love the sky.

Streaks
down my arm.
Why-


Good.
She smiled.


Am I
Such
A-


And I kissed her lips.

Liar?
Something I wrote a while ago. It was an experiment with formatting.
I couldn't get it to look exactly how I wanted with the DA text editor, but it's close enough to show the general idea.
What do you think?
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Drake-Dementia Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  New member Hobbyist Writer
It played with my mind at first to look at, so I had to read through a few time to really try and absorb the piece. It's interesting though, like two thoughts rapidly playing over one another at a single instance. Like someone's fading in an out of a state of self-reflection, or even a memory perhaps. Either way, it is a unique way to write that I am unfamiliar with, but I like it.
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GoGo-Ghosty Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Student General Artist
I see, I'm glad you like it though.
I intended it to be more of an intrusive memory

Thank you~
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